17A - Elevator Pitch No. 2

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1. https://youtu.be/8LCb6RXLzDM

2. Last time, the most prominent feedback was that I did a great job describing the problem and emphasized valuable points, but that I should get to the solution quicker and spend more time explaining the solution. I was surprised to notice that Mr. Lahera noticed I was reading from a script!

3. I attempted to explain the problem with the same points of emphasis but tried to run through those points rather quickly, highlight the importance of having an allergy menu, and then move on to explaining the solution in greater detail. While I relied somewhat a script for the first elevator pitch, I did not use a script for this second round.

Comments

  1. Nicholas A. LaheraOctober 25, 2019 at 9:49 PM

    Putting me on blast for noticing the script. That gave me a good laugh. I will say that I found this piece great! Your initial visualization was awesome because 10% does not seem like a lot, but 35 million people may resonate much more with the market. I am glad that you did not use a script because you seemed much more relaxed, confident, and passionate about your product. I also liked that your anecdote, not only places you are a subject of the service, but as an asset to those who may no nothing about the needs of people with allergies. I am excited to see your next Elevator Pitch, because I think, like I told Mauricio, you can probably perfect it next time. Keep up the spectacular work!

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  2. Brooke DesantisOctober 28, 2019 at 9:23 AM

    Hey Jonathan,
    I loved that you gave actual number projections throughout your pitch. It was helpful to as an audience member while listening to be able to understand more about the company and what they actually do. Overall, you seemed super confident during the presentation which definitely creates a more pleasing performance than someone who is unrehearsed and stumbling over their words. I also agree though that it can sometimes be noticeable when someone is reading off of a script because it doe not flow as easily!

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  3. Deasja PerrymanOctober 28, 2019 at 9:56 AM

    Hi Johnathan,
    Your idea has been one that has been interesting from the beginning and I think hearing you elaborate on the impact that allergies have on the lives of so many people, really drives home the need for your project. The use of actual figures to emphasizes the 35 million people suffering from food allergies and 1 in 10 restaurant goers, really highlights how an allergy menu would change the dining experience of large volumes of customers and helps create the appeal to the to owners of restaurants.

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  4. AustinAbramczykOctober 28, 2019 at 10:30 AM

    You definitely did great on improving your pitch from the first one!. This pitch felt very natural and you had a good flow in between your ideas. You did an awesome job at highlighting the statistics for the impact of your business idea. The pauses that you placed in your pitch were well thought out and didn't seem like it killed the effectiveness of the pitch. Overall, great job on improving your elevator pitch with the feedback you received from the comments!

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  5. Remi TaylorOctober 28, 2019 at 11:36 AM

    Hi there Johnathan! Very great job with this post. You definitely improved your pitch from the last time! I still think your idea of allergy menu's is very important and unique. You definitely explained the solution more and also got there quicker so nice job on that. I think overall your pitch is very good.

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